I will wait
on the last steps
where the light reaches,
just so.
just until the somnambulism passes
and my weariness lets go.
– sc
I will wait
on the last steps
where the light reaches,
just so.
just until the somnambulism passes
and my weariness lets go.
– sc
sheila sea 
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Absolutely!
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I will wait
on the last step
where the light reaches
just so,
until the somnambulism passes
and my weariness lets go.
Title: Hesitation
$5 and my opinion, you know.
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Thanks Skip! These are great suggestions. I’m always grateful for your opinion. :))
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Your work always pleases and delights me. I love your rhymes and the way you structure your verse. But, most of all, I love the way you make me feel.
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A man after my own poetic heart! Thanks Jack, that means a lot. :)))
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take heart dear one-sleepwalk no more…arise and be the women-you were created for…*hugs*
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Thanks Hannah. *Many hugs*
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Beautiful … real … evoking …
And it seems to want a different title than untitled, just for WordPress and co.
Following skipmars attempt,
a title: On the last steps where the light reaches just so, I wait until my change comes: the awakening from the somnambulism and end of weariness ….
Its almost as long as poem 🙂 Reminded now that titles sometimes take time to form.
You’re the painter, and no one know your painting like you do.
We, we stare and look and see and realise and appreciate.
Well done
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Thank you, I really appreciate your comments! And I think you and Skip were right about the title, I went with Somnambulism because I think it suits the theme I wanted to portray. I like long titles normally but this poem is so short, I wanted to give it, it’s due. Thanks again! :)))
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Oh I LIKE this.
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Awesome! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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I DID 🙂
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Wonderful!
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Thank you. :))
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Did you start taking ambien and ativan?
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Haha no!
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I asked as sleepwalking happens when you take them and worse
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Thanks for the new word! It lead me to discover a few more new favorites: noctambulism and parasomnia. I also read up on nightmare disorder but I couldn’t find a proper name for it
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Hi Christian! You’re welcome! You know I think I only knew this word because it’s used in Spanish a lot.. “sonambulismo”. we use it as a sort of metaphor for someone who’s restless in their life. I love odd and infrequently used words for poems. The nightmare disorder.. Could it be night terrors i. e. sleep paralysis?
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According to the mayo clinic site [http://www.mayoclinic.org/diseases-conditions/nightmare-disorder/basics/symptoms/con-20032202] nightmare disorder and night terrors associated with sleep paralysis appear to be different but closely related disorders. I’d be tempted to say they could be the same disorder and rather that sleep paralysis is a symptom not often experienced.
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This is perfect.
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Thank you!
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😊
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Well done. I have so much respect for you as a writer. You take chances, you keep your writing fresh. You are willing to step out of your comfort zone. More poets need to be like you.
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It took me too long to get back to this, I remember reading your comment when I was feeling so down and hopeless. It changed my day. It meant the world.. Thank you.. I can only keep trying.
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Sad to hear you’ve experienced difficult times. I am so happy to see you have started writing again. I hope you can seek comfort in this: You really are one of the best writers of wordpress. In the challenging times in my life, writing helped me survive.
Wishing you all the best. Better days are coming.
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Beautifully written
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Thank you!
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