a washed up locomotive
on a shore with no name
he enlisted my assistance
in pulling him to the grave
“I tried my best to see you off,
I lifted up my skirt
as high it would go.”
but the waves fought every inch
and the slow mourn like molasses
began to drag me down as well
I was
a washed up locomotive
on a shore with no name
searching for assistance
and an unmarked grave
– Sheila Sea
sheila sea 
this mesmerizes
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You think so? That’s so great. Thanks. I was unsure of it but its grown on me in the past 5 minutes, haha.
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Well I can surely relate to uncertainty. Sounds and rhythms and repetitions appeal to me too, which from where I’m sitting your composition was pretty catchy. I’m also an avid molasses fan.
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haha yes, molasses is fantastic, no? I’m obsessed with rythym right now. I’ve read it in your work which I throughly enjoy, btw.
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well I’m no expert, but I can tell you that the ‘enlisting…assistance’ does what the next one talks about which is pull or hooks attention. Now I’m getting a new start for a new day I came to this reply box and glanced again at Molasses, and saw it like I’d never read it but again got drawn in, I’d say, saying not as an expert but just someone who enjoys the learning, because of the twists and hooks in the rhythm.
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That’s perfect. I really enjoy your honest feeedback. 💜
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Likewise
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meeeeeeooooooowwwwww
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lmfao, right back at ya.
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i was copying what you said to me before
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haha oh, I remember. I remember it WELL.
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uh huh. I was thinking where is the cat but hey. gave me a laugh. 😀
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excellent
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indeed
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This is beautiful!
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Thank you so much, Haile. 💜
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Indeed such a beauty
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http://thewolfhowlsatnight.wordpress.com/2014/11/03/follow-to-be-followed/
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I like your poetry. I’m unsure of the message you’re relaying by leaving this post in particular as a comment but I enjoyed it, either way. Thanks for taking the time to read my writing.. oh, and thanks for follows & the likes. 😉
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U get it! X. Thanks.
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Love the rhythm in this poem! And thanks for dropping by and following my mostly poetic writings. I look forward to reading more of yours.
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Reblogged this on writing in airplanes and commented:
Happy to dust this writers work
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Gorgeous worda
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puts me in the mood of cartwheels and backflips, i like 🙂
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I love the way this made me think of everything she mentioned here. XD Such a beautiful piece I hope to find more. 😀 Followed back btw. Thanks for the follow.
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I’ve seen this word trending in your comment section and I generally aspire to be original but honestly it is a beautiful piece!
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beautiful
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This is a beautiful poem.
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Thank you. I really enjoy your work, as well.
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Thank you, I can’t wait to read more of yours.
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☺️☺️☺️
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I can definitely make contact with this poem, a bit too much in fact.
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Haha, well I’m glad I’m not the only one.
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Such amazing beyond creative poetry, Molasses. I absolutely love this. Love Pandora x
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Thank you, Pandora! I’m so glad you enjoy. 🙂
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I lool forward to reading through your current poetry and what is to come. Love always Pandora x
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Beautiful piece Sheila Sea, thanks for the follow!
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